Blog #9 re-do
DONALD AND ANA ARE LAYING IN BED THE NIGHT BEFORE HE HAS TO LEAVE FOR THE WAR
DONALD:
"Can you promise me something?"
DONALD TOUHCES HER HAIR LIGHTLY
ANA:
"I'm not sure yet"
ANA STARTS SOBBING, DONALD HOLDS BACK HIS TEARS WHILE WIPING HERS OFF OF HER CHEEK. DONALD STUTTERS AS HE SAYS THE NEXT LINE
DONALD:
"Will you promise me that you won't die with me?"
THE TWO SOB TOGETHER, HOLDING EACHOTHER
ANA:
"You'll try and come back won't you? You'll be safe, won't you?
THE TWO CRY HARDER INTO EACHOTHER
DONALD:
"Promise me, please"
ANA:
"I promise."
Blog #10 re-do
DONALD AND THOMAS WALK INTO THE STORE
DONALD:
"What are you doing?"
THOMAS:
"Don't worry about it, it's, nothing"
DONALD:
"No really, what on earth are you doing?"
DONALD CHUCKLES A LITTLE AS HE WATCHES THOMAS READ ALL OF THE TAGS ON THE SHIRTS
THOMAS:
"It's embarrassing... you'll laugh at me"
THOMAS CONTINUES TO SIFT THROUGH THE SHIRTS
DONALD:
"I've seen a grown man wear a woman's dress in our platoon in the war to crack a few smiles. There's nothing more embarrassing than that."
THOMAS STOPS TO LOOK AT DONALD
THOMAS:
"Well, I'm colorblind. I figured it out when I was younger, the teacher just thought I had a learning disability and I was held back a year in elementary school for it. I've never told anyone, I just, read what color it is."
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